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Demande d'emploi/applying for a job
Message de lionne777 posté le 27-10-2010 à 13:07:38 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger les fautes s'il vous plaît?
Name..
Address..
Phone nb..
Cellular..
Mail..
At present I’m graduate by BBA, Option: engineer of IT management to HIMI,
It is with interest that I raised(found) your announcement appeared on 22/12/2009 to( NEWSpaper )
DynamiC and motivated, I acquired during my first work experience, the qualities of listening and understanding necessary for this post ,while familiarizing me with the provided technical tools. This post would be for me a real springboard allowing me to begin my professional career in the best conditions and in the domain which I was already able to arrest(dread) during my training(formation).
Hoping that my application(candidacy) holds attention. I am held at your disposal to demonstrate you my motivation and my future prospects during an interview(maintenance).
Looking forward to an answer from you , approve, Sir, the expression of my best regards.
Merci pour vos réponses.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-10-2010 13:32
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Message de lionne777 posté le 27-10-2010 à 13:07:38 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger les fautes s'il vous plaît?
Name..
Address..
Phone nb..
Cellular..
Mail..
At present I’m graduate by BBA, Option: engineer of IT management to HIMI,
It is with interest that I raised(found) your announcement appeared on 22/12/2009 to( NEWSpaper )
DynamiC and motivated, I acquired during my first work experience, the qualities of listening and understanding necessary for this post ,while familiarizing me with the provided technical tools. This post would be for me a real springboard allowing me to begin my professional career in the best conditions and in the domain which I was already able to arrest(dread) during my training(formation).
Hoping that my application(candidacy) holds attention. I am held at your disposal to demonstrate you my motivation and my future prospects during an interview(maintenance).
Looking forward to an answer from you , approve, Sir, the expression of my best regards.
Merci pour vos réponses.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-10-2010 13:32
+ forum + titre
Réponse: Demande d'emploi/applying for a job de lamy, postée le 30-10-2010 à 16:58:09 (S | E)
Bonjour
Votre texte sent la traduction internet à plein nez.
De plus, elle manque de soin: pas de formule de civilité pour la commencer, alors que vous la terminez par 'Sir'…
Désolée.
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