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john beek/Correction
Message de radcliffe posté le 03-03-2009 à 17:03:06 (S | E | F)
pouvez vous me corriger cela où du moins m'aider à corriger mes erreurs? ,
I'm going to write about john beek.
I remember when I saw for the first time this movie, and, as far as I'm concerned, I liked it. I loved it because there were many actions, emotions and amity. This film told about John beek (it's the story of his life) and the different periods that he endured .
He was just a child when he met clara, the love of his life, then, he became student and joined United states army. After this period, john played at ping pong and became a champion. After was millionaire, he get married with clara and had five children.
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Modifié par bridg le 03-03-2009 18:13
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Message de radcliffe posté le 03-03-2009 à 17:03:06 (S | E | F)
pouvez vous me corriger cela où du moins m'aider à corriger mes erreurs? ,
I'm going to write about john beek.
I remember when I saw for the first time this movie, and, as far as I'm concerned, I liked it. I loved it because there were many actions, emotions and amity. This film told about John beek (it's the story of his life) and the different periods that he endured .
He was just a child when he met clara, the love of his life, then, he became student and joined United states army. After this period, john played at ping pong and became a champion. After was millionaire, he get married with clara and had five children.
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Modifié par bridg le 03-03-2009 18:13
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Réponse: john beek/Correction de azer3, postée le 03-03-2009 à 18:19:52 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici quelques éléments de correction:
I'm going to write about john beek.
I remember that when I saw for the first time this movie, and, as far as I'm concerned, I liked it. I loved it because there were many actions, emotions and amity. This film told/verbe mal choisi et mal conjugué c'est le présent/ about John beek (it's the story of his life) and the different periods that he endured .
He was just a child when he met clara, the love of his life, then, he became student and joined the United states army. After this period, john played at ping pong and became a champion. After was millionaire/ Aftreward, he became a millionaire and.../he get married with clara and they had five children.
