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Message de minette posté le 24-05-2008 à 18:29:05 (S | E | F)
SALUT VOUS POUVEZ ME DIRE SI MON EXERCICE EST BON.
Bonjour. Pouvez-vous me dire si mon exercice est correct, s'il vous plaît?
voici la consigne:il faut mettre les verbes au preterit
Rédiger cette histoire d'espion pas très doué à partir de ses notes.Utilise les mots suivants.and,but,suddenly,quickly,in the end.
On Tuesday night,I went to the Star Hotel where Tyson V. had a room.
-At 11.45/Tyson/come out-I /follow/him
-my mobile /ring/take it out /switch it off
-Tyson stop/tur round-I/jump behind a huge bin
-he/look at the bin for a long time-he /run away
-I /not/move
et enfin voici ce que j'ai fait:
On Tuesday night, I went to the Star Hotel where Tyson v. had a room.At 11.45,Tyson came out and I followed him suddenly my mobile rang and took it out but switched it off.Tyson stop turned round quickly.I jumped behind a huge bin.He looked at the bin for a long time suddenly.He ran away in the end I didn't move.
MERCI
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Modifié par bridg le 24-05-2008 18:54
Message de minette posté le 24-05-2008 à 18:29:05 (S | E | F)
Bonjour. Pouvez-vous me dire si mon exercice est correct, s'il vous plaît?
voici la consigne:il faut mettre les verbes au preterit
Rédiger cette histoire d'espion pas très doué à partir de ses notes.Utilise les mots suivants.and,but,suddenly,quickly,in the end.
On Tuesday night,I went to the Star Hotel where Tyson V. had a room.
-At 11.45/Tyson/come out-I /follow/him
-my mobile /ring/take it out /switch it off
-Tyson stop/tur round-I/jump behind a huge bin
-he/look at the bin for a long time-he /run away
-I /not/move
et enfin voici ce que j'ai fait:
On Tuesday night, I went to the Star Hotel where Tyson v. had a room.At 11.45,Tyson came out and I followed him suddenly my mobile rang and took it out but switched it off.Tyson stop turned round quickly.I jumped behind a huge bin.He looked at the bin for a long time suddenly.He ran away in the end I didn't move.
MERCI
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Modifié par bridg le 24-05-2008 18:54
Réponse: Espion à corriger de hoger, postée le 24-05-2008 à 21:58:16 (S | E)
On Tuesday night, I went to the Star Hotel where Tyson V. had a room. At 11.45, Tyson came out and I followed him [maybe a new sentence here?] suddenly my mobile rang and took it out but [why "but"?] switched it off. Tyson stop [tense!! + comma or "and"] turned round quickly. I jumped behind a huge bin. He looked at the bin for a long time suddenly. [check again where you end your sentence and start a new one!] He ran away in the end I didn't move. [make this two sentences, or at least insert a comma, an "and" or something]
Réponse: Espion à corriger de minette, postée le 25-05-2008 à 13:45:24 (S | E)
Donc sa devrait etre ça
On Tuesday night, I went to the Star Hotel where Tyson V. had a room. At 11.45, Tyson came out and I followed him.My mobile rang and took it out switched it off. Tyson stopped and turned round quickly. I jumped behind a huge bin. He looked at the bin for a long time suddenly he ran away.In the end I didn't move.
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Modifié par minette le 25-05-2008 13:46
