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Une correction urgente svp
Message de jenny62 posté le 07-10-2007 à 12:27:06 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour à tous!
J'aurais besoin d'un petit coup de pouce pour corriger les erreurs de mon exercice!
On doit expliquer ce que l'on a fait au cours dernier!
Il faut donc utiliser le passé, et, euh...
je ne sais pas si j'ai bien fait.
=> Last tuesday, we had got the gist of an audio cassette.
- It was an article adapted from "The times" and the title was "How to relaunch your personal brand".
- The casette concerned Leslie Everette, an image expert.
- According to her, we judge people on dresse, look, speak and use body langage.
- She says that if we are on the telephon a voice accounts for 84 %.
- Next, she says that appearance accounting for 55 %, a voice for 38% and the actual content for just 7%.
- For finish, she says tha women who wear lake up are paid 20% more and get promoted more often.
Merci d'avance pour votre aide.
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Modifié par bridg le 07-10-2007 13:03
Message de jenny62 posté le 07-10-2007 à 12:27:06 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour à tous!
J'aurais besoin d'un petit coup de pouce pour corriger les erreurs de mon exercice!
On doit expliquer ce que l'on a fait au cours dernier!
Il faut donc utiliser le passé, et, euh...
je ne sais pas si j'ai bien fait.=> Last tuesday, we had got the gist of an audio cassette.
- It was an article adapted from "The times" and the title was "How to relaunch your personal brand".
- The casette concerned Leslie Everette, an image expert.
- According to her, we judge people on dresse, look, speak and use body langage.
- She says that if we are on the telephon a voice accounts for 84 %.
- Next, she says that appearance accounting for 55 %, a voice for 38% and the actual content for just 7%.
- For finish, she says tha women who wear lake up are paid 20% more and get promoted more often.
Merci d'avance pour votre aide.
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Modifié par bridg le 07-10-2007 13:03
Réponse: Une correction urgente svp de jean31, postée le 07-10-2007 à 16:10:33 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Balisées en rouge les fautes de concordance des temps et quelques rares fautes de langue.
N'oublie pas que tu rapportes ces événements au passé.
=> Last tuesday, we had got the gist of an audio cassette.
- It was an article adapted from "The times" and the title was "How to relaunch your personal brand".
- The casette concerned Leslie Everette, an image expert.
- According to her, we judge people on dresse, look, speak<=le nom, pas le verbe) and use of body language.
- She says that if we are on the telephone a voice ----- accounts for 84 %.
- Next, she says that appearance accounting for 55 %, a voice for 38% and the actual content for just 7%.
- For<=(jamais devant une base verbale) finish, she says that women who wear make up are paid 20% more and get promoted more often.
Allez zou, rectifie
.Réponse: Une correction urgente svp de jenny62, postée le 07-10-2007 à 21:25:45 (S | E)
MErci beaucoup pour l'aide!!!!
